It felt good for a while.
Just for a moment.
It felt right.
It felt like the right thing
just for a while.
It made me feel
just for a while.
It made me feel nice.
It made me feel
like a woman.
Just for a while.
Just for a while
I felt loved.
June 2010
2 comments:
I liked this when you read it to me yesterday and I still do. I like the use of repetition which carries you along and sets the pace.
I think the construction still needs work as the flow falters at points. It jars the poem which in other ways flows beautifully.
IMHO, for what it's worth.
PS like the new layout, very cheerful!
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